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Monday, 16 March 2015

My Lion Quick write


It’s a beautiful day for filming. I’m in the car driving along slowly, looking around at the shinning lions lazing in the sun. Then one of the big golden beasts walk frightfully over, I see big brown eyes staring deeply into mine. Then a slobbery toothie mouth opens. What does he want? Does he want to eat me? Or just want to tell me to go away? Suddenly my heart jumps out of my chest, how did he do that he, he opened the door and I looked it straight away! I thought I was going to die, I told my friend to floor it and get me out  of this place.We drove away in horror.
I didn't expect that I felt like a rabbit running away from its hunter. How could such a innocent looking creature be so clever and vishous.
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4 comments:

  1. Anonymous16 March 2015 at 17:26

    Fantastic piece of writing, Niveek. You really paint a clear picture of what happened in the video clip. Great to see you experimenting with precise verbs and strong descriptive language - it hooks the reader in!

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  2. Anonymous16 March 2015 at 17:26

    Interesting reflection at the end, also!

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  3. Anonymous25 May 2015 at 20:46

    cool story! :)

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  4. Anonymous27 May 2015 at 16:37

    awesome I like it Niveek ! :)

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